Journey of the moments #15

While editing A Rainy Heart, mind wanders to another place,  the forgotten era of time past.  Words appear so I write them down, for the next novel yet uncertain of the title.  My friends,  readers and writers, what are your thoughts on these few lines?  Thank you.


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Besides the love for arts, I am fascinated with words that depicted the human mind and heart. I live in southern California and spend all free time when not working to dream, read, write, draw, and paint. Please note that all my writings on Wordpress are unedited since I write the words as they appear in mind at the moment.

21 thoughts on “Journey of the moments #15”

      1. Hahaha. Thanks! 😊

        I’m a firm believer we need more empathy in this world, particularly around those who practice our craft.

        Also, I write mainly dark fantasy and horror. Something has to keep that evil-Alvin contained! 😉

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  1. It’s a sub-genre of fantasy which includes horror elements, but isn’t horror.

    Horror is out to scare you. When people hear ‘fantasy’, they think swords and dragons. So the ‘dark’ description is there to set the readers’ expectations.

    Most of Neil Gaiman’s novels are great examples of dark fantasy. Horrible things happen in a fantasy world which can be urban, or other-wordly.

    To make matters worse (for me 😐), the protagonists in my debut novel are young adults. That puts my manuscript in young adult dark fantasy territory and little old me in a hunt for just the right literary agent.

    Did you see the Netflix series Stranger Things? That’s YA dark fantasy 😁

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    1. Thank you for the info. No, I haven’t seen Stranger Things series yet. What is the title of your novel? Has it been published? Where do you sell your novel? For my book A Rainy Heart I don’t even know what category it belongs to…maybe fiction, contemporary fiction? ☺️

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      1. Natural Selection is Book 1 of my dark fantasy trilogy. The series is called Conception.

        Haven’t published or posted any chapters yet (still thinking about my strategy). I will soon start the infamous query process to nab myself an agent and venture after traditional publishing. Wish me luck. Odds aren’t in our favor 😁

        I’d be thrilled if you read the first chapter. Just send me your email through my contact page and I’ll oblige if you are game!

        Regarding genre – yikes, it took a while! The easiest is to identify published works similar to yours (themes, setting, target audience) and look at theirs. Googling helps too, but you wouldn’t believe how inconsistent the industry is! 😐

        Are you on Twitter yet? Look alvin_chardon up!

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      2. Yes… thank you for all this info. ☺my Twitter is autumnwaterdove and email is… I think. I just created them few weeks ago. I think writing a query is difficult, and yes I will read your story. I never read any fantasy, thriller, dark fantasy, sci-fi before.


  2. Your opener reads like fantasy to me, although not necessarily dark. If you want some proofreading feedback, I think it could be improved a little by removing the comma after: The few who met her [no comma between subject and verb] attempted to erase her…

    It might improve the flow a little bit. But I wouldn’t worry too much about commas while you’re still drafting. 🙂

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